High School Entrance Examination Essay Training/Kongming Lantern is the Small Fire in My Heart (918 Banzhuo Xiaojie)

Teacher Ying’s comments :

"The meaning is still handsome. An army without a commander is called a rabble." An army without a commander is a rabble. An article without a theme has no soul and no life. In the writing process, topic review is the prerequisite and conception is the key. The idea is like the cornerstone of an article. Only if the cornerstone is well laid can a high-rise building be built. The most prominent highlight of Xiaojie’s article is its good intention. "The whole country will live up to its mission and move forward bravely." This is a big theme. The author starts from the small point of "Kongming Lantern" and vividly expresses the heart of "I" by describing the Kongming Lantern falling repeatedly and finally rising. The everlasting flame of hope. However, the text mentions "epidemic", "active response", etc., and it is best to echo them in the previous article. Only in this way can everything be done smoothly at the end. In classroom compositions, especially examination compositions, due to limited time, small angles and small incisions should be used when selecting angles. Start from a small point, focus on the big picture, and use small things to reflect major themes. In this way, difficulties can often be made easy, clever ideas can be devised, and a masterpiece can be achieved.

Kongming lantern is the slight fire in my heart (918 Banjo Xiaojie)

Kongming lanterns with prayers and wishes lifted into the sky, the burning lightA dull one(modified: in darkness), lights up the night sky and warms people's hearts. The continuous flashing light of the Kongming Lantern makes I am more and more determined, it is a small fire in my heart. (question)

When I was young, my mother would take me back to my hometown every Lantern Festival. The sound of gurgling streams and the crowing of roosters are common in my hometown. Passing the country road, I came to the canteen at the entrance of the village. If my mother couldn't find me, she would go there（Supplement: find me）. What often attracts me is the Kongming Lantern. Every time I look at the Kongming Lantern, a small fire seems to be gradually igniting in my heart.

As night falls, the family eats happily, warm lights shine on the dining table, and hearty laughter emerges from time to time. The adults talk about the past, and the children listen quietly, but I I couldn't help interrupting: "Mom, when are you going to put out the Kongming Lanterns?" She glared at me: "Don't interrupt the adults, just go after eating." So I pushed the rice into my mouth hard, and I didn't usually do it. Side dishesAnd(change: just)It’s hard to swallow white riceAt that moment（Change: instantly）Finished,Poop (Change: me) Dragging my cousin straight to the Kongming Lantern.

Gently tear open the packaging bag and carefully take out the orange Kongming Lantern. When I was a child, I didn’t know much, so the crooked handwriting of "Peace and safety, smooth success" appeared on the Kongming Lantern. I Gently hold the Kongming Lantern with your fingers and raise it high above your head. The lighter clicks, and after a while, the flame ignites violently. With your hand withdrawn, the Kongming Lantern floats swayingly into the sky with the wind. I clapped my hands with joy, my eyes reflected the flickering light of the Kongming Lantern, and the little fire in my heart seemed to be burning. But it couldn't resist the blowing of the wind and couldn't help but fall to one side. As if attracted by some gravity, it fell into the pond, and the flame was ruthlessly extinguished by the water. The fire in my eyes gradually dimmed, but the small fire in my heart grew stronger and stronger……(Comment: Many students don’t pay much attention to punctuation marks The use of , here changed to ellipsis, can give people endless imagination.)

Take out another Kongming lantern,(Supplement: me)Follow the steps just now, and One failure... By the fourth time, it was time to take off again, and the pounding heartbeat could be heard clearly(Supplement: Be)Hearing, the tense atmosphere spread, I took a deep breath, still raised the Kongming Lantern, lit it again, and waited for the wind to pass, the candlelight continued to flicker, it was time, I let go of my hands, the Kongming Lantern It rose precariously into the air again, but this time, it was not afraid of the wind's attack (Change: Earth invasion), with people’s prayers and wishes, it rises higher and higher, from a Kongming Lantern, to a slight fire, to a little starlight.

I think it goes forward with our wishes. We carry the high hopes placed by our teachers and shoulder the mission of the times. We must be like the Kongming Lantern, always have a slight fire in our hearts and not be afraid of the difficulties in life. "Feng'er", running forward. As the country faces the outbreak of the COVID-19 epidemic, it carries people's best wishes, braves the wind and waves, and actively takes measures to respond. Kong Ming Lantern, we, the country, all move forward with firm steps with the fire in our hearts. (This paragraph is of great significance and sublimates the theme of the article. However, the text mentions "epidemic" ", "active response", etc., it is best to echo them in the previous article.)

Thousands of Kong Ming lanterns, the prayers of every household, the small flame, although small, continues people's wishes,Wang(change: burning)With the light in my heart that will never die.

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