Guidance + Model Essay + Courseware for Workbook 5 "The Colorful World in Our Eyes" of the Third Grade Chinese Volume

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Writing ideas

writing mindset:

1. Review topic: The scope of this assignment is "the colorful world in our eyes". The colorful world can be written about a kind of thing or a scene.

2. Selected content: (1) Describe a kind of plant - prickly pear. (2) Grab the color and shape of the cactus and describe it. (3) Describe the living habits of cactus.

3. Expression: description, lyric.

4. Expression techniques: contrastive techniques, echoing from beginning to end, borrowing things to describe people.

5. Structural order: first directly point the question, tell readers that my favorite is the cactus, and use a contrasting method to highlight the characteristics of the cactus—strength; then write about the appearance of the cactus; then write about the living habits of the cactus, and then praise the uncle of the People’s Liberation Army by using things as metaphors; Finally, praise the cactus at the end to echo the beginning.

Fan essay + comments

Under water:

Paper one: cactus

There are many flowers in my family, and they compete for beauty, but my favorite is the cactus, although it is not as gorgeous as roses, as delicate as peonies, and as fragrant as gourami, it always stands there in obscurity and will not attract people. Eye-catching, but I like how tenacious it is.

The color of the cactus is dark green, which is healthy and stubborn. At first glance, cacti look like green palms. Its leaves are the thorns, don't underestimate the small thorns, it doesn't need to be watered, and there are so many cacti in the desert, I heard that the thorns can be kept for it Moisture and nutrients to make it more moisturised. It can live tenaciously with just a little water. So I really like the strength of cacti. Although it is ugly and a bit scary to look at, it has a lot to learn from it. Cactus can be used medicinally or ediblely. It has the effects of clearing away heat and detoxification, reducing swelling and pain, invigorating the spleen and stopping diarrhea, calming the nerves and diuresis.

Cactus does not ask for anything from people, but it has tenacious vitality, just like the uncles of the People's Liberation Army defending the country, they stand guard in the severe cold wind and snow; they stand guard in the hot summer. Isn't it the embodiment of the tenacious spirit of cactus?

I love the dark green cactus with tenacious vitality!

Comments: I started with a comparison, highlighting the characteristics of cacti and the reasons why I like them. Next, I describe the appearance and living habits of the cactus, highlighting its tenacity, and laying the groundwork for the following. Next, I used things as a metaphor to express my admiration by writing cactus to praise the PLA uncle. The ending again emphasizes that I love cacti, echoing the beginning.

Model 2: Dew

In the morning, the small dewdrops gathered on the bright green leaves were crystal clear, like bright little pearls scattered on the emerald green leaves, and the leaves shook slightly. A few small dewdrops hid in the grass mischievously, and could no longer find it.

The sun has just uncovered the layers of clouds, showing a golden smile, lovingly watching the earth that has slept soundly all night. In the cool morning breeze, little dew raised her round head and nodded slightly to the sun. The colorful light of the sun is reflected on the small dewdrops, and golden suns appear on the dewdrops. Under the gentle morning breeze, it rolled happily on the wide leaves.

The sun is getting redder and redder. It is so red that it shines brightly. After a while, the little dew disappeared.

Comments: The opening paragraph not only contains words that directly name the characteristics of dew, but also uses metaphors to vividly describe the characteristic of dew as "sparkling and translucent", and also shows the perishable and playful side of dew. There are not many words, but the expression is very rich. The second paragraph mainly uses anthropomorphic techniques, and also vividly portrays the lovely image of dewdrops and sunshine.

Model 3: Cactus

There are many beautiful flowers planted on the balcony of my house, including chrysanthemums, Clivia, prickly pears, camellias... Among them, I like prickly pears the most. Although it is not as bright as other flowers, I still like it very much.

The cactus is covered with small thorns all over the body, like small pompoms. Looking sideways, it looks like a little hedgehog shrinking into a ball, avoiding the pursuit of the enemy. Prickly pears are very drought tolerant. One year during the May Day holiday, our family went on a trip, and all the other flowers were dying. And the prickly pear is greener. The cactus can live tenaciously without watering for a month, so it is called "desert creature".

The flowers of the prickly pear are initially orange, then pink, and finally bright red. Although it is not as gorgeous as chrysanthemums, as noble as peonies, and as fragrant as camellias, I like its unassumingness very much.

I love prickly pears because it celebrates a strong and unyielding spirit.

Comments: This is an article with vivid language. The rhetorical technique of metaphor is used in many places in the article. The description is detailed and specific, and the details are vivid and lifelike. It vividly displays the prickly pear in front of readers. The article concentrates on expressing emotions at the end, pointing out the theme, echoing the beginning and summarizing the whole text, expressing the author's admiration for the prickly pear.

Fan Essay Four: Beautiful Begonia

On Monday, the teacher asked us to observe a pot of crabapple flowers.

Seen from a distance, the crabapple flowers blooming among the green leaves are very bright in color, like clusters of burning flames, forming a sharp contrast with the green leaves.

When I got closer, I found that the flowers of Begonia flowers are composed of many small flowers. Each little flower is like a drop of red water, exuding a sweet breath.

The fully open crabapple flowers are fiery red, just like the smiling faces of children, their smiles are so sweet; the crabapple flowers that are about to open have just opened one or two petals, like a small horn, I seem to hear There is a sound of "beep beep beep"; the unopened crabapple flowers are surrounded by green calyx, like a green wine glass filled with dark red wine, I really want to pick it up and taste its deliciousness... …

If the crabapple flower is like a beautiful girl, then the leaves of the crabapple flower are like her clothes. It may have something to do with the uneven sunlight exposure. The round green leaves are dark green at the front and light green at the back; the thin veins are evenly distributed, and combined with the small sawtooth around the edge of the leaves, this green coat is formed. The most amazing thing is that there is a layer of fine fluff on the leaves, which is used to "keep warm", very cute.

Some of the flower stems supporting the crabapple flowers are slender and some are thicker. The slender flower stems are like the soft waist of a girl; the thick flower stems are like the tall and straight body of a real man.

I love this beautiful crabapple because it adorns our classroom and beautifies our life...

Comments: The prose of this article is really wonderful! The author writes separately from far and near, which is very organized and convenient for describing things at close range and in detail. In the description, the rhetorical techniques used can be said to have made great contributions, especially the metaphors one after another, which make people dizzy and applaud! .

Paper essay five: fruits and vegetables in my family

Before you know it, summer is here! My fruits and vegetables are growing!

The peaches are growing! Tomatoes are growing! Even loofahs are growing. The green loofah is almost two meters high, and the emerald green leaves are as big as my mother's palm. Its weak figure wraps around the fence, its roots stretch straight up, and its threads circle and turn around the fence. You will think, it is so big and so long! It should be melon! Yes, it has fruited, but only one centimeter in size. It's not enough for you to stuff your teeth! The little tomato is almost one meter high, and has already unfolded her small yellow flowers, with a yellow round bud in the middle, and the bud is like a beautiful fairy, guarding its kingdom.

I love my fruits and vegetables.

Comments: The beginning and the end of this article echo each other, with a complete structure, pointing out the love for fruits and vegetables that the article wants to express, "That Baobao is like a beautiful fairy, guarding its kingdom", the use of metaphors in this article, and then Coupled with the author's humorous language, the fruits and vegetables described in the article are more vivid.

Fan essay six: Chrysanthemum

There is a pot of chrysanthemums on my balcony.

It is very beautiful, its petals are golden yellow, and its leaves are jet black, very bright. As long as it seems that the sun comes out, it always faces the sun, as if talking to the sun! When the wind blows, it dances lightly, very beautiful. It smells very fragrant. If someone comes to our place to see the chrysanthemum, they will definitely take a photo. Chrysanthemum can be used to make chrysanthemum tea, medicine, and cure eyes. If I were a chrysanthemum, I would let people smell my fragrance, give people my role, and let people see my beauty.

I like chrysanthemum, like its beauty, like its fragrance.

Comments: This article describes the appearance characteristics of chrysanthemums in vivid and vivid language. It uses anthropomorphic techniques to write that chrysanthemums can talk to the sun, and the performance is lifelike. It also describes other functions of chrysanthemums in plain language. The article ends with Straightforward language expresses love for chrysanthemums.

Fan essay seven: sweet-scented osmanthus tree

There is an osmanthus tree in the campus, tall and straight, very beautiful. It is not too much to say that it is tall, its taupe trunk stretches high into the sky. When I come to school every day, I smell the fragrance of sweet-scented osmanthus. The aroma of osmanthus is different from that of other flowers. Other flowers emit a faint fragrance, while osmanthus is fragrant and refreshing. Standing under the tree is like enjoying aromatherapy. The leaves of the sweet-scented osmanthus tree are green and glisten in the sun. The flowers are yellow, and the stamens are light yellow. The flowers are very small, like little stars. When the sweet-scented osmanthus blooms, the whole tree is fully bloomed, looking from a distance, it seems to be shining yellow stars; the yellow sweet-scented osmanthus blooms, like a yellow street lamp.

I think that misty starry sky, that beautiful Chang'e is also admiring this beautiful sweet-scented osmanthus tree.

ah! I like the osmanthus tree on campus.

Comments: The author of this article observes meticulously, and cleverly uses metaphorical rhetorical techniques, comparing "osmanthus" to "little stars" and "yellow street lamps", etc., vividly describing the beauty of osmanthus. At the same time, words such as "light fragrance" combine vision and smell to express the author's love for sweet-scented osmanthus.

Model Eight: My Favorite Morning Glory

At 5 o'clock in the morning, I seemed to hear a small horn pulling me out of my dream.

I opened the curtains, and my eyes saw a layer of black clouds. Suddenly, a purple light flashed over, which attracted me. We have to open our eyes and see the trumpet-like morning glory, wow! It's so beautiful! That flower, the petals are purple, and there are pairs of yellow cherries inside. I looked out the window and found that morning glory has different colors and different postures! Look, some are in full bloom, with the breeze blowing, they lower their heads, like shy little girls. Some are flower buds, which are resting halls for insects. I feel like a morning glory, wearing a purple skirt and a yellow hat, fluttering in the breeze. Ah, this is so beautiful!

I suddenly realized that it was not a flower.

I heard my mother's nagging, so I took a reluctant look and left.

Comments: In the article, the young author described the beautiful morning glory with substantial content, expressing the author's love and praise for morning glory. The writing of the article adopts the structure of total score, and the level is clear and organized; the description of morning glory adopts metaphor and personification rhetorical techniques to make the description vivid and the language lively. For example: "Look, some of them are in full bloom, and the breeze blows, and they lower their heads, like shy little girls."

Fan Wen Nine: Rapeseed Flowers

Today, Mom and Dad took me to see rapeseed flowers. I sat in the car and opened the window to enjoy the spring scenery.

Wow! Peach Blossom blushed with a smile, the willow tree was combing its newly grown long braids, and the swallow sang a song praising spring. The warm breeze is very comfortable on the face. "The rape blossoms in the field are blooming really well!" "What is that! You will see it later." Dad said.

arrive! All I see is a sea of golden yellow. I asked my mother, "Why do I only see one ocean?" My mother smiled and said, "Fool, what you see in front of you is a large piece of rapeseed!" And the bee is the cutest, most beautiful and hardworking little fish in the sea. I asked Dad: "What is the treasure in the sea?" Dad said: "The treasure is the sweat of the farmer uncle."

I finally know that the farmer uncle is the mother of this "sea of flowers".

Comments: The object described in this article is rapeseed. The author starts with a title and points out the reason for "I went to see the rapeseed flowers". In the middle, the author uses anthropomorphic rhetorical techniques to describe the shape of the rapeseed flowers meticulously and vividly, and points out the theme of "the farmer uncle is the mother of this sea of flowers".

Fan Essay Ten: Butterfly Dance

After class, Chen Tao and I rushed to the flowers in front of the teaching building. Suddenly, thousands of butterflies were startled, like a butterfly rain. The students were chasing and flapping, and it was very lively. Butterflies fly lightly like angels, as if vying for their homeland, and some even fight over a flower. Look, a butterfly rushed up and beat the other butterfly to pieces; some chased after it, and the other butterflies took the opportunity to snatch the pollen.

They are like blooming flowers, adorning our campus. With a wave of my hand, all the butterflies flew up, splashing like white waves. Then, they landed quietly again, like fairies, adding vitality and color to our campus. Sometimes, they also flew into our classroom, as if they were looking for friends who were playing with them just now, which made us very happy, and the classroom became lively again.

Comments: "The butterflies fly lightly like angels, as if they are vying for their own homes, some even fight over a flower. Look, one butterfly rushes up and beats the other butterfly; If you don’t let go, other butterflies take the opportunity to snatch the pollen.” The anthropomorphic use of images vividly expresses the mood of dancing butterflies all over the sky. "Sometimes, they even flew into our classroom, as if they were looking for friends who were playing with them just now. This made us very happy, and the classroom became lively again." The problem of contemporary man and nature is well thought out.